Approximate reading time: 2 minutes
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I was inspired by @brigetboyle[archived] to write more lyrics this year, so I took my guitar and just sang my heart out. The dog part is true, the girl part not so much.
Please feel free to comment on my vocals, as I don't usually sing and I would constructive feedback on how to get better. Also, I know the lyrics start by not rhyming and rhyme in the end, but that's simply how it came out. 😀
Thanks for listening!
There’s this boy down in my street I don’t really know his name He always comes down to my house And plays with my dog There’s this girl in my school Who I really like She carries her books close to her chest She has the most beautiful smile One day I’m gonna ask her out One day I’m gonna figure out How things work One day I had to leave town I left my dog behind It was the saddest day in 15 years Of an entire life I never told the girl in class The way I felt for her And my old dog stayed with the boy That lived down in my street One day I’m coming back for you One day I’m telling you How I feel So many years have passed by So many farewells and goodbyes I fell in love with many other girls I got lost in many different tries I still remember my old dog I saw him many years ago As for the girl that was my love She had her second son, a boy named Joe One day I’m coming back for you One day I’m telling you How I feel And everything I’ve seen
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This is great. Engaging lyric and melody. Especially like the chorus.
This story is very good. The interweaving of two seemingly unconnected things is so well done. You make it all make since. Very good!
😁😁 yeah it's about taking the chance while it's there, not letting it slip away, and also losing that poor dog 😁 there's something to think about in this funny story.
I like the contrast between "one day" looking forward, and then backward. The regrets for things never attempted or left behind come through well.
'One Day' is a great hook, And you sing it out great at the start of each chorus. Keep writing story songs - they don't have to be all true!
This sounds British and I like that about it. I like the vocals, it has a distinct original style that's you. That's what vocals are all about.
The lyrics are so simple but there’s such a universe profound feeling it conveys.